Lovely! And L♡VEly! (Thanks to ysabetwordsmith for the pointer.)
Fix the formatting, though. Everything from "What is born of the flesh is flesh." to "They called the police. The police weren't sure what to make of her; they had armed bandits to arrest and stolen property to recover and cats to pull out of trees." , inclusive, is centered.
And sometimes I found it hard to keep track of who was saying typing what.* Using font styling to distinguish them, like italic or bold, would interfere with using those for emphasis, but you could use a different font. If you put each of Alex's dialogue lines in <big><tt>___</tt></big> tags, they'll come out like this, in "typewriter" font. It's probably easiest to copy <big><tt> and then paste it at the start of all the lines, then do the same with </tt></big>. (I tried without the "big" tags and it came out way too small.)
* This happens in mainstream published fiction, too, when there are long exchanges of one- or two-line turns. And in one of Steven Brust's Dragaera books [I forget which, but if you like them you can check out Cracks and Shards] I think the author lost track.
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Fix the formatting, though. Everything from
"What is born of the flesh is flesh."
to
"They called the police. The police weren't sure what to make of her; they had armed bandits to arrest and stolen property to recover and cats to pull out of trees."
, inclusive, is centered.
And sometimes I found it hard to keep track of who was
sayingtyping what.* Using font styling to distinguish them, like italic or bold, would interfere with using those for emphasis, but you could use a different font. If you put each of Alex's dialogue lines in <big><tt>___</tt></big> tags, they'll come out like this, in "typewriter" font. It's probably easiest to copy <big><tt> and then paste it at the start of all the lines, then do the same with </tt></big>. (I tried without the "big" tags and it came out way too small.)* This happens in mainstream published fiction, too, when there are long exchanges of one- or two-line turns. And in one of Steven Brust's Dragaera books [I forget which, but if you like them you can check out Cracks and Shards] I think the author lost track.